Lemon Lift

It was an experience... We have been writing about a 'delicious' wedge of lemon we were given to eat, BUT.... before tasting we had to use all of our other senses to record what we could see, smell, feel. We examined our lemons in detail before the 'taste test' then we had to record our ideas, painting a good picture for the reader without actually using the word 'LEMON'. For some, this moment in time was not too painful, but for others it was not a treat! Here is a selection of our writing... Our next step is to work on developing a 'hook' to engage the reader and build up descriptive detail. ENJOY :)

Gracie
What am I?
I'm a bright yellow colour and when people look at me they scrunch up their face. When you lick me I'm sour as if you have burnt your tongue. You can make a drink out of or I can be a medicine if you have a sore throat. If you write about me most people would say 'tangy, sour or bitter citrus'.

Jocelyn
The sour citrus sits in front of me, making it tempting for me to eat. I pick up the bright yellow, tangy fruit with my hand, my fingers wrap around the fruit to lift it. Slowly it comes toward my face and my mouth makes an entry for the fruit. Sour juice pours out onto my taste buds making me squirm and squeal. My face scrunches up as the sourness from the fruit becomes worse and worse. My mouth becomes dry and numb, but now it's all over, leaving sweetness.

Jacob
Yummy! My eyes were watering as I started sniffing the yellow citrus fruit. It smelt like it was full of all the sour things in the world. I could feel the skin like rubber and slime goo. My piece was shaped like the crescent moon. As I took a bite my eyes started watering hard out. It started getting more sour and I swallowed it.

Jamie
Whoosh, as the scent brushes past my nose smelling sweet. It's yellow like a banana, the shape of a crescent moon. Two different textures - one hard and rough, the other soft and slippery.It has sunflower seeds in the transparent inner. I put the whole flesh in my mouth...tangy, sweet, delicious. Munch, munch and the flattened skin is all gone.